If you want an honest critique, this was sort of a "DUH" opening sentence. But other than that, there's absolutely nothing wrong with this piece. It's quite good and on the mark. Why do you think it was chosen for curation? They don't pick duds. They turn them INTO duds, but they don't pick duds.

Again, have some faith in your very excellent writing skills and ability. You are a good writer and you've proved this over and over. And 99% of the time you make excellent if not perfect choices, which puts you near the top on this platform.

How does that translate into success? I dunno. If I knew the answer to that question by now I'd be a gazillionaire, I guess. Just like all the other gazillionaire's around here.